Mary ([info]mary_re) wrote,
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My Classic Canon Challenge fic

Title: 'Twas Brillig
Pairing: None
Rating: PG-13
Summary: based on The Jabberwocky, a poem by Lewis Carroll. For the Classic Canon Challenge.
Word Count: 1412, including poem
Notes: Dedicated to [info]sarky_moocow. You totally rock my socks. Thank you so much for the incredibly wonderful beta job, in spite of me springing it on you at the last second. I appreciate it greatly.</p>

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'Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe;
All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe.

"Beware the Jabberwock, my son
The jaws that bite, the claws that catch!
Beware the Jubjub bird, and shun
The frumious Bandersnatch!"
</p>

Harry was worried at the direction his thoughts had taken. He had tried to hold himself together for the past few hours; tried to tolerate the curses and the strain they put on his body without allowing it to snap his mind. Between the curses and Legilimency attacks, he had grasped at anything to keep his mind occupied on something other than reality.

His thoughts kept fixating on the lines of a poem only half-remembered from childhood. Some nonsense rhyme a teacher had read to his class at primary school, and Dudley had taken a fancy to, and forced his mother to read to him every night. The words ran together: ’twasbrilligandtheslythytoves…

Immediately after Apparating, Harry had been Stupefied and his wand taken away. They had taken no chances on losing him this time. Voldemort, reveling in the position he finally held over Harry, had summoned all of his Death Eaters to see Harry brought low. Their encircling robes had blackened the day.

He took his vorpal sword in hand;
Long time the manxome foe he sought--
So rested he by the Tumtum tree,
And stood awhile in thought.

And, as in uffish thought he stood,
The Jabberwock, with eyes of flame,
Came whiffling through the tulgey wood,
And burbled as it came!
</p>

Beware the Jabberwock, with eyes of flame! He half-hysterically thought to himself, and then chuckled brokenly at the thought. He was certain his laughter would only anger Voldemort, but at this point he could not make himself care. They were already beyond all that, and he knew if Voldemort wanted to look into his mind to see what the laughter was about, he could. Harry had no defences left, a fact of which both he and Voldemort were fully aware.

And it started out as such a nice day, Harry thought to himself. Slowly awakening on a quiet Saturday morning after an amazingly dreamless sleep.

The three of them had been enjoying the morning. Harry and Ron had wanted to start up a pick-me-up game of Quidditch, but Hermione had insisted that they study. As a compromise they had brought both their books and a Quaffle outside, and settled down under an outcropping of trees near the forest’s edge.

At the beginning of the year, Dumbledore had disallowed any forays into the forest, even for Care of Magical Creature and detentions, and everyone had wondered why, as he had offered no explanations. But it was a lovely day outside, and as Ron had put it, they weren’t planning on going into the forest, now were they?

The boys had both made a half-hearted attempt at studying, but quickly grew restless in the morning sunlight. They got up, and after a sharp warning from Hermione had stepped a good distance away from her and the books, and had begun to toss the Quaffle back and forth, with Hermione glancing up occasionally from a book.

What had started out as a game of catch had quickly escalated into a game of ‘try as hard as you can to make the other miss the Quaffle,’ and inevitably a wild throw had landed in the forest. Ron had been the one who had missed catching it, and so insisted on retrieving it, and Harry had insisted on tagging along. After a quick glance to make certain Hermione was engrossed in a book, they had slowly moved into the forest.

Five minutes later, Death Eaters had appeared. He supposed Voldemort had had a net of spells set up to warn him if Harry left the school grounds and entered an Apparition zone. One had immediately grabbed Harry and Disapparated, but before they left Harry had caught a glimpse of the second raising his wand at Ron instead of following directly.

Now, Harry supposed, he had his reason not to enter the forest. Damn Dumbledore for not telling him, and damn him for his stupid theory about the Gryffindor sword…It wouldn’t be much use, would it, not when I haven’t even the strength to lift it, or the training to use it even if I could. My trusty vorpal sword! Inwardly he was screaming at Dumbledore for allowing this to occur, while outwardly he only glared at Voldemort.

One, two! One, two! And through and through
The vorpal blade went snicker-snack!
He left it dead, and with its head
He went galumphing back.
</p>

Right now he was too exhausted and sick from curses and the nausea of a forced Apparition to summon the concentration needed to call the sword to his hand. It would come to him when he called, but he had to do so.

He was empty-handed and blank-minded, so he focused solely on the poem, grabbing it as a lifeline to fix his thoughts on. He hoped any stray thoughts of a sword could be attributed to the poem. The sword of Gryffindor was the last possibility he had left, and if Voldemort picked it out of his mind he was screwed. He frantically ran the words through his mind: tookhisvorpalswordinhand, longtimethemanxomefoehesought…

It was working. He stared at the ceiling as Voldemort gloated, bragging that Harry’s all-consuming fear of him had broken his mind. In truth the terror at the situation was huge, but buried beneath it was a wellspring of hatred and determination. If he was going to die, here and now, he was not going to go without rebellion.

Then Voldemort was above him and goading him to rise, jeering at him to fight despite the fact that they both knew he did not have his wand. He scrabbled from back to knees to shaky feet, trembling in apprehension and what Voldemort took as fear but was actually dreadful determination.

A raised wand, the beginning of the incantation; Harry’s mind screamed at him- tookhisvorpalswordinhand! Ohgodohgod, nowplease!- with hands in front of him, held in position in preparation for the sword that needed to appear, had to appear.

The incantation finished, Voldemort’s face was terrible in triumph, mocking Harry’s futile hallucinations in the face of his death.

But there was a shimmer in Harry’s hands, and a green light reflected from a sword bounced back to strike the caster. All went quiet as the tall figure fell.

Silence hung, and was only broken by the clink of the metal sword-point hitting the ground, and scraping as it was drawn across the floor to Voldemort. Harry folded down, almost collapsing next to the body as he looked into the face and recognized death. A Death Eater came forward, and Harry tried to summon enough strength to raise the sword again, but Snape only took hold of his arm and Voldemort’s cloak, and Apparated away.

Harry closed his eyes in renewed exhaustion and nausea, and opened them to see the Forbidden Forest.

Snape released him and stepped back a few paces, leaving Harry standing next to Voldemort’s body. Harry stared down blankly. The poem filled his head suddenly, all he could hear- onetwo,onetwo, andthroughandthrough, thevorpalbladewentsnickersnack- and he half-chuckled, half-sobbed, face trying to crumple. But he grimaced, stiffened his resolve and straightened his face, refusing to break down in front of Snape.

The next line of the poem struck, hard, and he wearily raised the sword. Snape looked on without comment.

"And hast thou slain the Jabberwock?
Come to my arms, my beamish boy!
O frabjous day! Callooh! Callay!"
He chortled in his joy.
</p>

A few minutes later they emerged from the Forest and came to a halt at the front steps of the school, meeting Dumbledore, who was on his way down. Harry stared up at him.

"Ron? Is he..."

Dumbledore shook his head, opening his mouth to speak unwelcome words of comfort, but Harry silenced them by stepping forward and holding Voldemort’s head out towards him.

Harry’s mouth moved, trying to find the words.

“I…I’ve slain the Jabberwock, sir.” He placed the head at Dumbledore’s feet. Then, turning, he walked past the gathering crowd, moving towards bed and a sleep without dreams.

'Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe;
All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe.

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[info]jedi_penguin

July 30 2004, 20:08:45 UTC 7 years ago

'Twas brillig indeed!!! I loved that!

[info]mary_re

July 30 2004, 20:13:21 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks so much!

I posted, and no-one commented, and I was having a heart attack. So, thanks again! lol

[info]jedi_penguin

July 30 2004, 20:28:15 UTC 7 years ago

*sigh* Happens to all of us! My all time favorite HP story never got a single piece of feedback. Not one. Others that I liked but didn't love? Tons.

This is an excellent fic. Exciting, unusual, and a very nice use of the original work. As such, it is likely to get less feedback than a drabble that you throw out in ten minutes. c'est la vie

Good luck!

[info]freesnowcone

July 30 2004, 20:37:40 UTC 7 years ago

Happens to me sometimes, too. Makes your stomach twist, doesn't it? ;) But no worries, because this rocked! Incredibly well-written and just ohsogood!

*thunderous applause*

[info]mary_re

July 30 2004, 20:46:09 UTC 7 years ago

*huge sigh of relief, tentative bow*

Thanks! I suppose that nasty feeling of apprehension must happen to every writer...but thanks for commiserating with me about it!

And you liked it! Eee!

*grins, sends loff*

[info]anjenue

July 30 2004, 20:52:45 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, Mary, this is fantastic! I love the way you've chosen to use the poem in here, and the story...mmm. The way Harry functions is so perfectly Harry. And the death was WONDERFUL.

[info]mary_re

July 30 2004, 21:08:58 UTC 7 years ago

Woo-hoo! Thanks, Anj! I'm glad you think Harry is IC, that is always my biggest worry.

And the death? *cheers* Well, Harry couldn't very well get into an epic sword-fight, so I had to try and come up with a believable way to work the sword in from the poem, and I'm so glad it worked!!

*is tempted to use excessive punctuation!*

[info]purple_smurf

July 30 2004, 23:43:38 UTC 7 years ago

Gah! That was just... gah! I love the poem, I love it to pieces, I love Carroll, and that you put Carroll and Rowling together is just brilliant. Utter brilliance. And Ron! No! And it was just... gah! Rereading it now.

[info]mary_re

July 31 2004, 09:56:14 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, thank you! I absolutely love Carroll also, and just tried to do justice to the twisty awesomeness of his poem.

I'm so glad you thought I did!

[info]all_booty

July 30 2004, 23:54:23 UTC 7 years ago

Wow, very nice. This is what you've been worrying about the last week or so? You really shouldn't have, it's great! I love addled!Harry. And the way you worked in the sword just fit so well. I think I'm going to start fangirling you now, does that sound okay to you? ;)

[info]mary_re

July 31 2004, 10:09:46 UTC 7 years ago

Well, I've been so worried because I've been writing this all since...what, Monday? Rushing a story is bad and evil. I'm just glad you like it, after hearing me fret for, as you said, the past week.

Ohyes, and the sword. It was my favorite bit that was remarkably difficult to fit in ('cause Gryffindor sword? Such a cliché, normally.)

Lastly, feel free to fangirl away! (You really liked it that much? Eee!)...but it was the country music post that started it all, wasn't it. You could not resist my incredible taste in music, lol.

*cheers quietly in the background* Someone wants to fangirl me!

[info]all_booty

July 31 2004, 11:00:31 UTC 7 years ago

Yep, you got it. Country music's gonna save the fandom, lol.

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[info]wren_chan

July 31 2004, 02:23:53 UTC 7 years ago

Good God, that was gorgeous. And so appropriate! It's just that Harry's too tired to be chortled at yet..

Marvellous work. *bows deeply*

[info]sarky_moocow

July 31 2004, 03:49:13 UTC 7 years ago

Woo! Thank you, my dear! :D
And I stand by what I said before - this is The Fabulous. *loves*

[info]mary_re

July 31 2004, 11:20:23 UTC 7 years ago

Of course! This fic would have been much rougher and not nearly as good as people seem to think it is without you.

And I'm happy you liked it, and beaming that you pimped it in your lj! Even more <3333!

[info]sarky_moocow

July 31 2004, 11:23:54 UTC 7 years ago

Nonsense! I hardly pointed out anything, dear, it's all your own wondrousness.

<3333

[info]maerda_erised

August 9 2004, 23:59:33 UTC 7 years ago

*shamelessly fangirls* you did to me again. wowowowowowowowow!!! this is awesome!!! and i am, again, speechless. which is a terrible thing, really, since we are not RL so you cannot see my expression of joyous heartbreak. excellent, excellent writing, my dear. just excellent.

These are some of my favorite lines ever: Voldemort, reveling in the position he finally held over Harry, had summoned all of his Death Eaters to see Harry brought low. Their encircling robes had blackened the day.

and the Gryffindor sword tie in was just perfect--not cheesy at all. and Ron! *weeps*

more please.

[info]mary_re

August 10 2004, 00:39:36 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, you picked out my favorite line! Oh!

And I was so worried about working in that sword, because really, the poem requires it. But normally when the sword appears in a fic it all falls into this huge clichéd mess, so I tried to be a bit original.

Yes, Ron.

More? Eep! I'll try...

[info]cheshirepuss

August 10 2004, 11:20:57 UTC 7 years ago

Oh yay! I am so happy someone wrote a fic centered around that poem. I love everything Carroll, and this fic was just so well written. I had goosebumps when Harry gave Dumbledore Voldemort's head and said he had slain the Jabberwock. That's just creepy.

Great job!

[info]mary_re

August 10 2004, 11:55:24 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks! It's so reassuring to hear someone who also loves Carroll say that I did well with the poem.

Oh, goosebumps, yay! Lovely reaction, thanks again!

[info]fluffyllama

September 6 2004, 12:22:41 UTC 7 years ago

I'm quite gobsmacked. I can't believe you actually managed to HP that! And to do such a great job if it - I am so very impressed :-)

Very, very nice work indeed.

[info]mary_re

September 6 2004, 22:32:20 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks! As you can tell by my icon, I am quite the nerd for that poem, so my main worry was doing it justice with this fic.

It was the "eyes of flame" and "chortled in his joy" that sold this as a poem that would work with HP, because come on! Red-eyed Voldemort, and gleeful father-figure Dumbledore? It wrote itself, lol.

I'm glad you liked it.

[info]gazebo_jamith

December 28 2004, 02:18:30 UTC 7 years ago

I love it. THe poem is one of my favorites, and the way it was used- brilliant.

[info]mary_re

December 28 2004, 06:55:35 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you! I'm so glad that you liked it...it is one of my favorite poems as well, and I was so worried about doing it justice! *g*

[info]easleyweasley

May 23 2012, 11:01:08 UTC 6 days ago

Excellent. Very nicely done.
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